I call every //nice// person who views my blog (this one as the main one) Mystical Sparks, or Mistians. Best friends I call my Sweggsters as well (as well as characters too). I //used to// have this post segment called Cute Pup of the Day. This blog is drifting away from being an AJ blog into just a more general blog. Unlike other AJ blogs, I sometimes swear in my posts. I also am still writing Twinkle's Story (the first story in my The Extraordinary Others //TEO// series). It is NOT your ordinary (or not ordinary) AJ story. It has scenes of strong violence (still getting to that point lol) with lots of blood (lol gore), //substitute// swear words, and romance (with some sensual content)- and I try to write them in detail. If you can't handle that, then I don't suggest viewing my blog often because I post about my story often. I say swag/sweg a lot too, haha. I post about anything I like, and I sometimes vent. Because, like, I'm a teen. So yeah.
~ Cutepups
The RIM is this thing.
If anyone wants to comment a commercial skit, then go ahead. I have something else in mind for this post... >:D
So anywho, I have found a song that I immediately fell in love with. As some of you might know, I like rock songs more than pop songs (except for a few.. more like alternative music nvm).
So yeah. This song. Omg yes. <3
I'm pretty sure there are no swears in this particular song, but just in case there are, that's your warning.
(*I own NOTHING about it- the song, the lyrics, the video, the video-maker.. nothing! >:0*)
"My Nightmare"~ Get Scared
Just.. Just yes. :) <3
For like the first time ever, I don't think this song has an immediate connection to Duke and/or Fierdan (one of my Twinkle's Story characters I type about very often).
So now it's time for the swag surprise that features sensitive content and violence.
YAY! XD
(Yes, it involves Twinkle's Story, but I'm writing this as vaguely as possible, and it won't be written as it is here. Because of obvious reasons, and because I'm still planning the scenes in the future out.)
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The night was very dark, and the air had a misty feeling to it. High up above, some stars tried to shine down, possibly as a sign of hope. The misty layer of fog obscured the stars to brighten the world far below them. There was no hope, not tonight. There also was a biting wind, and that wasn't only because of the weather finally turning colder. It was as if even the nature above was watching in dreaded horror the scene that enfolded far, far below.
In the clearing, there were three visible foxes. There were two guys, and one girl. The two guys looked distinctively similar, except for a few very minor details. The one slightly taller was a bit behind the other two, in a attempt to appear hidden when the following events took place. He felt upset and guilty, but it had to be done. He explained it to the other male fox, who he inferred was explaining it to the girl. All three of them had tears in their eyes, running down their faces.
"No! You can't!" the girl cried. "You can't do this!" She had the most tears run down her face, leaving her face wet and splotchy.
The other guy, whom she was speaking to, replied rather calmly. It frightened her even more. "You know I have to do this. He told--"
"What if he was just lying to you this entire time?! What if he always has been evil?!" the girl interrupted, screaming.
The other guy turned his head away from them in his lame attempt to hide from the guilt. This time, however, he knew he couldn't run away. He had to stay at the scene.
"He's not evil, he's telling the truth," the guy in the clearing replied.
The girl just sniffed with her heart pounding in her throat as he went on talking to her. She thought this was so unnecessary and uncalled for.
"You know if I stay here any longer, everything- this world- will be destroyed even more than it is now. You know ever since the Night of the Black Flames that my bomb started to count down. I'm that bomb! I hurt so many people, even your own family! I'm a freaking demon's puppet!"
"I... I don't care!" the girl cried. "I love you so, so much! You can't just throw your life away!"
The guy replied as calmly as he could. "If you love me, then you would understand that I have to do this. I'm not throwing my life away, this is for everyone's sake. And besides..." he looked over his shoulder and made eye contact with the other guy who came along. The guy nodded at him, and he turned around again to make his eyes stare only at the girl in front of him. Her deep blue eyes that held so many memories of them together, from the best to the worst.
As the air grew colder, the cuts and bruises that covered the guy's body stood out more than ever. But even more than that, two deep purple flames, outlined in black, shone inexplicably brightly. One covering his heart- he was shirtless-, and one surrounding his left eye with the black tips of the flame slowly spreading out to cover most of the left side of his face. The girl sniffed as he finally picked up the weapon that laid down at his feet, minutes before. The two guys brought it with them, that special shooting weapon, because it was the only weapon that could work- and the weapon played a major role in what was about to happen.
Holding the weapon carefully, he walked over to the girl. He carefully but quite forcefully put the weapon in the girl's right paw and made her wrap her fingers around it to hold it herself. When she finally cooperated with him and held the weapon up, the trigger pointing threateningly at the guy, he backed away to where he stood before.
A few minutes of silence washed over the clearing. Time kept on ticking by without a single thing happening.
Finally, after growing impatient, the guy spoke in this serious tone to the girl. He only said two simple words, his eyes on the trigger pointed directly at his heart. "Shoot me."
A minute later with the girl not saying anything as she held the weapon frozen in fear, he spoke again. "What are you waiting for?! Shoot me."
Several seconds later, the girl finally said, "No... no. I can't... I can't shoot you!"
The tips of the flame around his eye grew around in all directions reaching into his forehead, upper cheek, and area between his two eyes. He was starting to become frustrated and desperate with the girl. He yelled at her, "Yes you can! You're not gonna kill me... technically. Just shoot me already!"
"No..." the girl whispered.
He screeched. "Shoot me!"
After another few minutes without the girl pulling the trigger, he angrily walked up to the girl and stole the weapon from her grasp. He walked back to his original spot yet again, holding the weapon casually down at his side.
The girl's sobs and whimpers faded away to background noise as he carefully aimed the weapon's trigger to aim straight at his heart. His heart that was the source of this ticking time bomb about to explode and destroy everything he hadn't done already. His heart, his flaming heart, that was the source of his living hell.
He still stared into those blue eyes. Those twinkling blue eyes. Then, at that moment, he pulled the trigger. The trigger of the weapon that was aimed at the heart of the flame, the heart that was his gateway to hell and the demon; the trigger of the weapon that was aimed at his heart.
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So... Did I make anyone cry? ;D
Got some action and feels (sad) here? ;)
lol jk
But seriously though. I still have troubles planning events to happen between where the story is now and when this scene takes place (which isn't the "end" end of Twinkle's Story).
You might think it's somehow "cliche", but I bet it isn't how you think it would go afterwards. (lol no)
So yeah, I'm evil. Boo. >:)
Ha Ha Ha
Bye.
Don't bother asking me any questions about the writing piece. I won't answer any of them.
ReplyDeleteYou can compliment it of course. Or give me ways to improve? (Even though this version is VERY vague with the names and explanations wiped out in this, and like in 3rd person POV. XD)
But commercial skits would be nice too. :)
Good story. No reaction though but then again, I'm slowly becoming numb to all that. Was I ever a swegster?
ReplyDelete-Fomar
Thanks. Eh.. it's alright. If you'd like to be called that, then sure. c:
DeleteMy lord Doitsu my eyes are really watery now DX. WHY MUST YOU DO THIS PUPPIOS? WHY? I NEVER cried while reading something (that's a lie, but it's REALLY RARE). I GIVE YOU A PAT PAT ON THE BACK BECAUSE YOU'RE ONE OF THE FEW AUTHORS THAT MADE ME HAVE ACTUAL TEARS (and stinging eyes oOo). Well, I'm not surprised because you're really good and talented.
ReplyDeleteI LEARNED SOME THINGS YESTERDAY THAT I WANT YOU TO KNOW, so have a suggestion??? (Omld, I never gave adivice before WHAT DO I DO???). But maybe there could be more active verbs rather than passive. Like, instead of saying, "he was standing at the front of the class" say, "he stood at the front of the class". But then again, sometimes it's better to use the passive verb :/ (I DID THIS A LOT, AND I STILL DO IT BY ACCIDENT. I just learned about this yesterday too XD.)
And there's this other thing I learned: show don't tell. For example, don't say, "he growled angrily," say, "he growled through gritted teeth" so you can get the gist that he's angry without stating it. (AGAIN, I DID THIS SO OFTEN, I'LL PROBABLY DO IT AGAIN. And... I... Just learned this yesterday. I JUST WANT YOU TO KNOW THE STUFF I KNOW :D.)
YOU'RE AMAZING. *awkwardly shuffles away*
OMG THANKS MUTANT YOU'RE TOO KIND! AND HAVE YOU EVER READ YOUR OWN WRITINGS?! THOSE HAVE SOME SCENES THAT MAKE ME THINK I WILL HAVE TEARS IN MY EYES TOO! :0
Delete(Yesh, advice, woo! :3)
Haha, it does sound better.. remind me to use those types of verbs more often.. various.. lol jk. I'll try to incorporate them in the story though. c:
Know that too. I was being very vague in this writing piece, so that's why the writing quality isn't too descriptive. Hmm.. maybe I'll make more detailed show-no-tells in my actual writings I try to work on. Like put effort in. Yeah. c:
SO ARE YOU! :D
I'll smack you every time you use a passive verb >:D
DeletePlease do.
Delete(I mean it.)
Oh! Oh! And while writing, don't actually explain like the prophecy or what bad stuff is going to happen, just explain like, what's happening in the story that sorta corresponds with it?? I think this story gave me a smidge of feels. A smidge, okay?? xD but for some reason I think it could be stronger! Like, I know it's pretty dramatic, but it feels a little bit repetitive near the end. It's actually an okay ending, (but we're gonna make all our writing a tad bit better haha) but it feels like you just repeated how the gun was placed on his heart. And you know how I'm good with endings, and not the other parts of the story, amiright? x3 But I think in the end, you should leave something to be desired/something theme like. Like idk, it's one of my fav endings of yours, but could be better?? Like ' he took the gun from her, placed the cold metal on his heart, and pulled the trigger, and he was gone. ' (ok ok that's really bad but I don't even know what I'm telling you) the plot of the story is kind of okay, I kinda like the idea (even though, okay, let's face it, it's kinda cliche) but I think there's a possibility things could be added! Like maybe using more literary devices or whatever they're called, or adding more hints to the future/making this scene a little bit more complex. It's the little things, but you'll get there. Don't be so down on yourself if I tell you these things. Your writing is the best when you're having fun with it, Blues, I've noticted that. c:
ReplyDelete*sigh* Sorry if I make you feel bad...
DeleteHaha, I know. I KNOW, okay? To you guys, I bet this writing is vague/uninteresting and cliché. Honestly, I can't really blame any of you guys for that. Oh and I know the ending here is so repetitive. I'm still planning out this actual scene out.. just less repetitive. But that's kinda like the ending of that chapter/person's POV (idk yet). Like, the chapter or whatever ends with that. But, you don't know how hard it is for me to not spoil everything (even though I don't even have everything planned *lamely laughs*). And what I do, I try not to reveal anything important that none of you guys know about yet, so it makes it look cliché, but it isn't //as// cliché as you think it would be. Because, if I actually make these //spoiler// scenes descriptive, I'd just spoil everything (that I don't want to do). But then it would seem cliché here now (ugh life). Let me guess, the cliché you think is here is that he either dies or stays alive after he shoots himself.. but really, it's more complex than that. Because, you'd expect someone to die or stay alive after that, but actually he neither dies nor lives (how I can't say cuz I don't want to reveal spoilers like I just said a gazillion times). And the name of the place, weapon, and.. the ritual of the events in the scene have special names for them (that I still have to come up with). Oh and this scene is not even the ending to Twinkle's Story (sure, the ending of the evil stuff, but so many other things happen before the story ends). Ugh, I'm just frustrated when you assume things.. even though I intentionally left out so many important parts in the writing here. And to be honest, I also saw some cliches in the story writings you've uploaded too.
SEE, you're being real here. You're not pretending to be nice to me when you're really mad at me, and trust me, that's OK.
DeleteI know you're mad, and I assume A LOT of things, okay? I am not a nice person. I'm just trying to be truthful okay? Do you want me to lie to you and tell you that your story is perfect? I'm not trying to make you feel bad! I'm trying to help you improve but honestly if I ever am not super happy nice kind everyone doesn't like me anymore! So fine, okay, I understand what you're saying because someone saying these kind of things to me has always offended you. But I'm not TRYING to. I'm just trying to say what I think, what I mean, and I'm sorry if I didn't sugar coat it! Honestly, I have way too many cliches in my story and I couldn't even write until now, so I'm happy. But you could of been honest with me and tell me what you didn't like, but honestly I don't like when people say bad writings to me, so just do whatever you want. I'm tired of just telling everyone 'that's nice' 'that's good' when I don't even know if I care anymore!!!!! I understand what you're saying about your story so I'll try not to comment on it from now on because I end up messing everything up!!!!!
Whatever, I'll regret this later, but I don't even care, I'm tired
No, no, no.. I think you're misinterpreting what I have to say again. I mean I like how you're being honest with me, but in this writing piece **in THIS post** I INTENTIONALLY made it so it wasn't my best writing. In my legit writing posts, my CHAPTER posts, I like your honest opinions/critiques.. I really do. No, I don't think you as not my friend anymore, and I never had. Ok gotta go for now.
DeleteO...k....
DeleteYay- guns.
ReplyDeleteForgive me- I've been watching Angel Beats last few weeks. I've been thinking about those guns and Panasonic.
Oh, I heard of Angel Beats.. might start watching it soon.
DeleteStill not completely sure if the weapon will straightforward be a gun, combination with other, or just not a gun. .. story planning is stressful.
I have been on this blog ever since I saw you in the AJBA!
ReplyDeleteCool, haha meant other possible people I talked to on AJ yesterday. X3 don't know if she viewed my blog or not lol
DeleteWhat's your answer?
DeleteAnd do you view my blog everyday?
Delete???
DeleteEvery time I see your blog show up on my Dashboard, yes. So, for the most part, I view your blog every day. c:
Finny: Here is the ... actually, even I can't make it sound good
ReplyDeleteSparkle: So move! I can make anything look good!
*pushes him away and puts on monster teeth*
O_O
Yes, yes, yes! We have some Spinny going on here! ;0
DeleteCutepups Logic: *makes commercial skit where Finny confesses love for Sparkle* *makes ship name Spinny* *did not plan their relationship in the actual story as more than just friends* *has them kiss in actual story due to inventing the word Spinny* :3