*Since stories I was just reading gave me the "feels", I decided to post a new chapter here. Because of something called "Cutepups failing to post so many feels in this story and series- //sob". Seriously, the "feels". Just, like, why.*
*So many interesting concepts I still have to do. I hope this chapter is interesting enough. Gah.. I love hurting my characters so much. So many evil author thoughts, hehe.*
*Enjoy the chapter!*
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DAWN
"Ugh, what's taking them so long? They were supposed to give Duke to me already. Where could they possibly be?" I complain as I stir the spoon in the teacup. They always did what I told them to do. They are like my personal servants- my lovely servants.
In the meantime, I made some new tea for when he decides to show up. His favorite- mint tea. I lift the spoon out from the depths of the tea and raise it right above the cup. The perfect mixture of water with a tinge of a warm hazel brown to form that soothing tea color, and those crisp and neat mint leaves floating throughout the tea- some resting on the bottom of the cup, some touching the surface, some floating in rhythm with the flow of the tea itself.
With, of course, the exceptionally sweet aroma of the most wonderful herbs and spices. Being the earth Elemental Power, I have a way of using the finest plants in existence.
And of course the best-of-the-best leaves have to be used for him. He deserves the best-of-the-best and nothing less. I even saved him before- in his reincarnation form, I mean- when he had that heatstroke in the emptiness. He had Twinkle, and she couldn't do a thing. Saying she deserves him- ha! She knows absolutely nothing about our past, my past with Fierdan.
Poor, poor Fierdan. Having to go through such extreme pain to be prepared for his Elemental Power, fire. The most intense and painful- to self and others- Power. Mastering the art of flames.
And on top of that having so many people eager to tear him apart. To get a glimpse of his epicness, to understand, to avenge the deaths he uncontrollably caused. Whatever the reason, they all want to exterminate him permanently in the end.
I'm the only one who can protect him. No matter what the cost. Even when he hates me more than anything in the world, I still love him, will still protect him from the horrors of the world. Always.
Twinkle will never have what Fierdan and I have. So what if their Elemental Powers have a spiritual past which connects their spiritual forms in the closest ways possible? She'll never love him as much as I do.
In our original forms, he was my first friend. I thought I was all alone, surrounded by the black. All the black. I was so confused about where they all went, why they formed a blurry image in my memories.
I didn't know what happened at all. Except that a moment I once knew I had parents, and a moment later not remembering them at all. One moment by my side, the next nowhere in sight. Only remembering my name, Dawn.
So young, so innocent. I never once forgot his bright amber eyes, the only bright thing in the darkness. Even when he had that murderous glint in his eyes aimed at me, I never forgot that day. That day we met.
He was so excited when he saw me. His bright eyes and big smile lit up his face like fiery sparks. "Y-You," he had stuttered, "You are alive. I-I'm not alone anymore."
I was crying in the sea of black. Then he came right in front of me and said, "Hello! Why are you crying?"
And I wiped my eyes and stared at him. "I... I... I don't know what happened to them. Where are they? Why can't I remember them? Are these black forms them?"
Then he said, "I don't know where we are, and I can't remember anything before being here either. You are the first person here who is just like me... alive."
Then I sniffed, "We only have each other now, you mean?"
And then he beamed down at me and said, "Want to be friends?" followed by giving me a hug while I nodded my head.
I don't know how long we've been silently like that until he asked, "Do you remember your name?"
I hesitated and said, "Dawn."
And he replied, "Well, I'm Fierdan."
"F... F... Fee-ear-dan?" I stammered, and then he told me how to pronounce it correctly- Fierdan.
And that's how Fierdan and I first met. Twinkle will never understand that about us. Our connection of being alone in the dark. I need his living form, Duke, more than ever.
No one has a closer clue to his true past but me. Not even Twinkle.
I stop staring into the tea, and I look straight ahead in the direction of the cliff.
I'll always be here waiting for you to come back and be how you were back then. I'll never stop waiting... for your return.
CALLIAH
"You are gonna do what we tell you to, darn it!" he yells and then kicks my side.
"T-Taurel," I whisper, "You truly are insane."
His left eye twitches as he says, "W-What did you say? Come on, get up you darn vixen!" He yanks my right paw, forcing me to my feet.
I reply with more courage in my voice, "You can do whatever you want to me. I'm never gonna do that to him."
"Yes you are! You are gonna torture your so called son and break him apart. You're great at doing that already, so stop refusing to cooperate!"
I stare at the rest of them who are surrounding me and Taurel in a circle. All their sinister faces. Sparkle and Finny holding paws and snickering. The rest of them giving me deadly glares.
A few minutes pass before Taurel says in an exasperated voice, "Fine! I'll do it myself then since you are a stupid, uncooperative, useless vixen!"
The adults murmur among each other while Sparkle and Finny just stare straight at me. Then Risak goes up to Taurel and whispers in his ear. Afterwards, he smiles at me.
"Okay then, Calliah. I have a less... umm... heinous task for you. How about instead of doing the torturing and experimenting yourself because you're too much of a darn coward, you get rid of that memory-wipe spell you casted on Duke. You see, we have to know the true extent of his power, his murderous intent, before we can go any further. We have to be prepared for him. You understand, don't you?"
I simply say, "No."
Taurel simply responds by knocking me down to the ground once again. Punch after punch to the sides of my face, he yells suddenly desperate, "You don't know what you're getting yourself into, Calliah. Do you have any gosh darn idea who Duke and Fierdan actually are? They're ticking time bombs! They have to be ridden of before they explode! They're gonna destroy not only this world, darn it! They have to be stopped immediately!"
Oh, the Fierdans? Oh, they're ticking time bombs alright. And I'll just wait until that glorious day when they both explode and make this corrupted world finally end once and for all.
DUKE
It turns out I wasn't crying for hours. It was only a few minutes, really. I guess all the agonizing pain I was feeling just made time feel way longer.
It also turned out that the government fake that barged in on me intentionally hurting myself and getting dressed- that creep- didn't exactly die. Well, his finger that touched my black flames died.
Actually, the other government fake ran into my room almost immediately after I began sobbing on the floor of the room. He pulled out a pocketknife from one of the pockets in his suit, and swiftly chopped off the inflamed and throbbing finger. I guess he couldn't feel his finger being chopped off because he was unconscious and didn't shriek or anything. I guess having the finger that had the black flame deadly poison in it being removed from the rest of his body saved his life.
That government fake is still unconscious. This one, however, is staring at my black flames that are still shooting out from right underneath my shoulderblades at my spine like wings. Just like the other one, he shows obvious interest in my black fiery wings.
"Black flames," he murmurs, "the most beautiful color of flames. They look quite stunning on you, my Fier... I mean Duke sir. Mastering flames is a true art."
I lick the blood that's pouring out of the cuts on my right wrist and say, "Just remember not to be a stupid fool and to not touch the black flames like your buddy over there did. I'm not really in the mood for killing someone today."
For some reason, the taste of my blood feels so good on the tip of my tongue. When I lick the blood from my wrist dry, I bite the palm of my paw. Heck, maybe so many people want to break me apart because they want my blood. My... delicious... blood.
He cuts off my thoughts about wanting to drink all the blood in my right paw so it can feel numb, just like my soul, by suddenly saying, "Duke, you are quite something. A big something! You're like a demigod... if Zios was an actual god I mean. But you're still quite something, Duke Fierdan. By the way, what do the "D" and "U" in your name stand for?"
I look up from my paw at him. "What the heck are you saying? Duke doesn't stand for anything. It's just the name Fierdan decided to name his reincarnation, which is me. It's not an acronym or anything."
But he only says, clearly deep in thought, "Hmm, maybe the "D" and the "U" stand for what the "K" and the "E" mean in one of those ancient Jamaasian languages or one of the languages of the Ancients."
Now looking down at the floor, my black flames moving with the flow of air, I get flashes of Twinkle. Seeing flashes of her in my head keep me silent.
Until the government fake says, "You know you were created to be a puppet that's only supposed to know the evil in the world and become it. Even your name, Duke, proves it. The "KE" standing for "Kill Everybody". It's in your very nature to be cruel and heartless."
I blink. "Are you saying I'm only Fierdan's bad traits? Because you're very stupid then. Fierdan was never cruel and heartless. It was--"
"Oh, but who actually did the killing in the end? It was him, your past self, and you can't deny that."
I continue to stare at my feet. "It was never his fault. It's Zios and Mira's fault. It's their fault, it's theirs, they caused this hell!" My black flames move more quickly.
He traces his index finger along my jawline and makes me raise my head to look him in the eye. In a sly voice he snarls, "It's about time you stop blaming your heinous actions on your parents, new Fierdan."
I don't know what is in this guy's fingertips because ever since he touched my face, I've been suddenly feeling nauseous. I say, "M-Mira was never my mother. I... I--"
Without warning, he slams his fist into the left side of my face at the jawline. I feel my teeth ringing in my head due to the impact. Blurry images spin in my head. I grab my knees and cough.
"Stop lying, darn it! You're not gonna escape this time! You can't escape any longer, darn you!"
I start coughing up blood. I feel like I'm dying inside, but my black flames are still shooting out just as strongly as they were a few minutes ago.
What the heck has gotten into me?!
"I can escape any time I like. You can't stop me, you helpless fool. I can do whatever the heck I like."
Then I'm knocked to the ground. I then feel being dragged to the door, the red shirt draped over my back.
Once we leave the building, he snarls, "Now it's about time I take you to Dawn."
Dawn...
The haunting dreams of me brutally killing her come to my mind. All the blood, all the fire, all the screams.
"No!" I scream as he drags me across the ground. "Don't bring me near Dawn! Please... don't."
He just rolls his eyes. "Stop complaining! You are gonna be with Dawn and do whatever she wants you to, and that's final!"
"You don't understand!" I cry out. "You have to keep me away from her! I'm gonna hurt her so much! Just... under--"
He smiles at me. It makes me very uncomfortable. "Oh, you're gonna hurt her alright."
"I don't even love her!" I blurt out. "I'm with Twinkle now, gosh darn it! I'll never love her as much as I love Twinkle!"
"Oh, you're funny, Duke."
After nearly a half hour of being dragged, he suddenly yanks me upright. "We're here, get up!"
Still feeling sick, I stumble to my feet and stand up. I cough up some more blood.
"Oh, before I go. Gotta tell ya something. It was really great of you to let my partner touch your black flames. They really are deadly and toxic... how lovely."
And just like that, he started walking away. Finally feeling my black flames diminishing, I put on the red shirt. Wait... What happened to my black outfit?
As an answer, the government fake throws my black clothes behind him as he continues to walk away.
I immediately put the black clothes over the red. What's the point of looking dressed up in fancy red clothes when you already look like a wreck on the inside and outside?
After a few seconds of standing there and doing nothing else, I hear footsteps coming from the direction of the mountain in front of me.
Her bright green dress comes into my sight. Then her dusky brown hair, not tied up this time. No hat covers her eyes this time either. Her eyes are just as bright as those visions I had all those weeks ago.
"Hello," she says as she brushes her fingertips on my cheek. The feeling of leaves gently brushing against my cheek as they swiftly fall down fill my mind as she touches my face. Just like falling leaves...
"I missed talking with you," she murmurs, her soothing breath now on my neck.
Suddenly, all thoughts about Twinkle disappear. I hear myself saying, "I missed you too, Dawn. I missed you so badly."
She giggles so sweetly. Mesmerized by her eyes and her touch, I look straight at her. Just looking at her feels like my cuts and bruises are fading away. It's like she's healing me by just standing there and touching the right side of my face.
"Take off your jacket, you must be burning hot," she whispers. I nod and take off the black jacket. As well as the black shirt.
Dawn smiles at me. "So this is the shirt they planned for you to wear, eh? Well, I don't really care about that. You don't really look that good in it. Take--"
Before she can finish her sentence, I nod. I take off the red shirt.
The purple and black flame that covers my heart is still slightly glowing. Not as brightly as before, but it's definitely still glowing.
She traces a finger on the tips of the flame and whispers, "Black flame. I'm guessing you're asking for explanations about it?"
I finally say, "Yeah. So can you?"
Dawn closes her eyes and nods slowly. "Yeah, yeah. Of course I can."
Suddenly, I feel her soothing and minty breath on my lips.
Again, what the heck has gotten into me?!
I kiss her, feeling the taste of mint rush into my mouth. And then I do it again and again.
TWINKLE
I open my eyes and suddenly scream. In this strange new place with a stranger staring at me.
"Hey," the black fox in her weird black clothes says.
"Who the heck are you?" I demand.
She just laughs. Her bright black eyes are giving me the creeps. Her laugh is too. "I'm Black Raven!" she cackles. "Who do you think I am? A, you know--"
"Okay, okay! You're Black Raven!"
"Yeah, that's me. I can form into an actual raven, but I'm usually just a... umm... fox. Yeah, fox. I also teleported you here, if you've been wondering."
I begin to look around. The room we're in is pretty cold too. I rub my arms. "Where'd you take me to, Black Raven?"
She smiles. "Oh, just call me Raven! You don't have to call me anything fancy, girl!"
I just stare at her blankly. Then I say, "Uh okay, as I said, where are we now?"
"We're in your and your sister's castle. Duh!" Raven laughs and points up at the wispy clouds on the ceiling.
I blink at her. "My uh what?"
"Your castle, silly! Just like how your boyfriend had one in his past life, so did you. Do ya have any idea how you two met in your first lives?"
"Umm... no," I admit, "I didn't even know I was also a real reincarnation like... like they are."
Raven just lets out a laugh. "Of course you are! All you guys are! You're part of the gang too, Twinkle!"
I nod and stare at the icy blue walls. "The pattern is quite astounding," I comment, "It looks very complex. Who made it?"
Raven simply replies, "You did of course."
Suddenly, Raven stands completely still with her smile no longer on her face. "Oh dear..." she breathes, worry in her voice.
"Twinkle, I am so sorry. It's your puppet boyfriend."
Then the images pop up in my head. They're real pictures. They... They...
"How could he?!" I choke out. "He... He told me he loves me an infinite number of times over her. I-It doesn't l-look that way!"
Raven simply replies, "Guys are such jerks, Twinkle."
I just nod my head and sob into her neck.
A few minutes later, she whispers, "I'll always be here to support you, my dear Twinkle."
I should've known it wasn't gonna last forever. No one truly loves and cares about me in the end.
:I Fierdan is uhhh, kissing while he is naked, and Dawn is kissing him back. Hey, so ya'know that "Bad Blood" scene I told you about earlier? In Bad Blood, it has the words "mad love", but Twinkle never really liked Dawn, so if you do wanna use the idea (for a skit or chapter or picture or not use it at all) Instead of Twinkle fighting Dawn, she can fight Duke and them Twinkle touches black flames. Fire vs. Ice. Love vs. Hate. Oooh, interesting ):D Then again, y don't have to use the idea.
ReplyDeleteNah, he has them bloody red and deadly black pants on now. ;3 but ya that's basically it... Dammit Duke! >:0
DeleteOoh, kewl! So basically a skit where Dawn and Twinkle fight in a wrestling arena, and then Duke Fierdan stands out in the crowd looking suspiciously swag, and then Dawn and Twinkle team up to fight Duke Fierdan? Oh and then Bad Blood plays in the background while she fights Duke Fierdan herself? Ah, that skit idea sounds pretty interesting! ;D
From now on, I'm gonna have to make my very occasional Fierdawn skits more love than hatred now. But there will still be hate ):3
ReplyDeleteBut remember. Their relationship is very complicated. It is a LOVEHATELOVEHATELOVEHATE relationship.>;3
DeleteBackstory time.
ReplyDeleteEh, what's so evil about this chapter?
Lol yeah I felt like just going out and typing it this chapter. XD
DeleteEh.. I really don't know. Um, people may have other opinions.. idk. Idk.. hmm.. only this chapter... Idk having characters beat other characters up and then there being blood, and then Duke like how he's speaking with "Fierdan's voice" since he refers to his parents and not like Calliah and Eternal who are Duke's parents (too confusing to clearly explain, sorry) and then with Dawn. Maybe that's kinda "evil".. even though it isn't really. Yeah.. I don't know how to really explain.
Is Duke's blood actually tasty or is it just cuz he wants to kill people? Either way, he'd probably dehydrate, I've never before in my life see Duke drink water. He is fire though.
DeleteHm, let's ask him. ;3
DeleteUs: Duke...
Duke: What do you want from me now?
Us: Is your blood actually tasty?
Duke: Are you serious.
Us: Yes. Are you secretly a vampire?
Duke: No.
Us: Um ok so do you like tasting your blood because you want/like to kill people?
Duke: No, I just like hurting myself because it makes everything better.
Us: No, no, no! Don't think like that!
Duke: What's the point?! I've been broken ever since the Night of the Black Flames!
Us: *is wary of Duke*
None of the characters actually drank water in the chapters. Not even Twinkle.
Then they'll all die.
DeleteWell, of course they do (and you know, go to the bathroom X3). I just read some writing advice by many different people on all different sites and such saying that if an author adds in their story when the characters drink water or whatever and when they use the restroom, it isn't good for the writing piece. Like, it's un-needed information. So I don't put in (that often) that they do those things. But they do. It's just un-important for the plot in the story. So yeah, haha. ^-^'
DeleteOh. Maybe after a dramtic event though, they can drink some water
DeleteHmm.. maybe.
Delete1/2Ok...I'm going to be honest here, alright? Don't think this is like an angry personal message at you-because it's not. This is just my personal opinion, that idk, may help you.
ReplyDeleteOk--honest, I do like your story at parts. Some are very intresting and heart wrenching at parts. It's not as if I do not enjoy reading it, your writing, I believe, has even gotten a bit better. But, even with a sad heart I say this, is that your characters and plot are....kind of weak. *CALM DOWN THO CUTEPUPS* because it feels, even though you have some 'feelsy' and 'seperate conflicts/different things to make it more intresting' it feels like I already know what's going to happen...almost just like I know the ending will result in Duke/Twinkle being together forever, a big dramatic ending where all the evil is defeated, all the couples become canon, and at the end...well, they live peacefully in the human world after defeating all the evils. And it's not as if it's totally bad as a whole, just everything seems only surface deep to me at the moment....like, the plot kind of well, cliche, Twinkle/the other TEOs good/Fierdan having only an internal conflict with himself....it feels like the characters only have their surfaces, and eventually this kind of plot will only get so far. So, to help kind of, I'd guess I'd recommend getting REALLY deeper into the characters. Not just them as a person, their WHOLE--what makes them tick, their personalities, (and by that I mean their personalities further than their trauma leads them, and trust me I have this problem) and like, actually thinking of what they would do in a normal day, what they like/dislike, what MOVES THEM FORWARD, THEIR INNER CONFLICTS, and the plot---well, I think I would like it if you'd stop reflecting so much on their dark pasts, which seems the only thing that drives them to rebel, and thinking of something, no, what makes them HAVE to go forward, not just what makes them continue the plot. Instead of "fighting against evil" think of different themes that could be incooperated into a bigger message in the book, like, -not like there is evil in side of us or something basic- more like, them growing up and learning from their mistakes/develpoing their characters/being able to face their fears/finding love in the darkest of times
Okay, I hope you're not mad at me for not replying sooner; I couldn't earlier, so.. Oh and I'm not bad about you for being so serious and elaborate in your comments nowadays (though I do miss your silly and short comments too). Hmm.. How to put this?.. I appreciate your comments because you actually give me writing advice and, kinda, critique them. Because I know my plot and themes and such are kinda bland with always being about evil and darkness and bad pasts and, you know, all that kind of stuff. Like, I already KNOW I have to improve on that kind of stuff, I just either suck at it or just simply don't know how to make it better. Ugh, even I hate myself for always writing about that kind of stuff in basically every chapter. :( I have a brief description of their personalities and traits and what you said, but just saying that randomly in the chapters just feels.. odd?. Ugh, I know it's so flat. Yeah, that other stuff you mentioned.. I struggle with those too (obviously).
DeleteHonestly when I read the part of your comment, when you say the ending is such a "know-it-all" and all happy-like made me laugh. (Plz don't kill me ;o;). Because the ending isn't that happy (deaths, they kinda defeat the darkness.. which I hope is in a way you guys are not expecting). And the human world isn't all happy either. The human world doesn't mean everything happy, everything's solved, everything peaceful. Like, the evils will get defeated (somewhat) but it's not gonna be a "happily ever after". Because I'm trying to make the ending a bit less cliche than you guys will probably anticipate.
hahaaa, no. Not saying like, their personalities IN the actual story, of course that feels odd- just doing that separate to sort of help you work with your characters better. Like, can you imagine Duke saying "I'm a mean person, but actually I'm very soft and broken inside?" LOL. Gosh, Duke. Ya I know you proably already know that kind of stuff. It's fine, cutepupios. I'm not even that great writer myself, honestly. I'm just tired of always feeling like I have to tell people I love every single thing they do...you know? Not that I didn't love what you do. Just feeling like I had to be like that...I guess. Idk.
DeleteNo, I'm not mad at you, gosh no. I was just upset because I wrote these late at night and I wanted you to respond :'D
Haha, I KNOW THAT TOO. But it won't stop me from thinkin' it's gonna be cliche. And I'M SORRY. I'm proably only making you feel worse saying these things when you already know them. Ugh if only there were some way we could both improve :v I'm trying to be a better friend but honestly I'm actually a horrible person lol :v
Haha, exactly! Like Twinkle won't go, "Um hi readers, I used to get bullied and I felt sad, bye." randomly in the story (or any character, really). That's just.. weird. o.o LOL. Yeah, I get what you mean though. Getting to any EMOTIONAL LEVEL with my weird characters like ONE-ON-ONE INTERVIEWS. Lol what XD. Mhmm...
DeleteYeah, I was about to go to bed when I checked Blogger one last time (lol like the millionth time of the day) before, like, sleeping. And I saw your comments. Then I skimmed through them in that moderation thing and thought, "serious long comments.. um uh.. oh.". So then, I woke up late this morning due to forgetting to set my alarm (smart move Cutepups), and I didn't have time to check Blogger. And yeah, that's me. X'D
Yes, KNOW, we both KNOW. Ugh, I'm scared I'll even make these ending story events cliche.. and I hate it >:(. But you should see what my original story-ending ideas were.. cliches, they be everywhere *delete* *delete* *delete*. o.o
Ikr we so need ways to improve! :v
Ha ya man I feel like I'm telling you this but I'm gonna write so many cliches myself :'D
DeleteBut it's ok. Serious thoughts are tiring, I know haha.
Lol I'm tired. I have a Spanish thingy later :v
Yeah, cliches are just not 100% avoidable! (I think o.o)
DeleteYep lol
Me too (well, I just woke up so..), and I have Spanish today. ..wait, what XD? Good luck on that Spanish thingy. :v
2/2-well those are basic more like- how people are so seperate and different/what connects people in this world/what friendship really means (sort of like that, I guess. Something more than a basic theme that can be said for every book) and another thing, the cliche love story you incoperated, I know one of the parts of your story are Duke's and Twink's relationship, but I feel rather than 'seeing eachother and falling in love at first sight'/'loving/hating eachother because of a past bond' is more sterotypical than anything, I mean, isn't love getting to know a person and loving them slowly rather than throwing them into situations where they kiss/fall in love? -because that doesn't feel very real to me, and frankly, doesn't feel that important to the story. (Lol look at me-I'm being harsh on you ). So idk. I feel like it would be cooler if you; yourself develed into the story a little deeper and finding the parts of that that matter most instead of finding evil(s)/people to blame in the story and rather focusing on the things that made you want to continue writing the story or is an important part? I recommend looking at different storylines in books- or going off basic plot lines like intro-rising action-climax-falling action-resolution or finding adventure-learning something from that adventure-going home AND finding themes in books you liked the most/what you like most about a person's writing, etc. And looking in your own life to see what makes you, well, YOU, and that will help you figure out the characters, see, a person is so in depth, so of course a character (which is also technically a person) is a character as well. There is some of potential I see in there, of course. (I especially liked the Heaven parts and stuff about the TEOs) Some parts I don't like, but of course some I do...haha. That's why I read it in the first place. I dunno, I dunno, I feel like you could and have the potential to go deeper into the plot.
ReplyDeleteLOL I hope this advice helped---(I can't even write my own story) just some personal stuff. I hope I don't non-motivate you to write or something. Lol I'm so serious nowadays I may just be sending you advice every story time. Much sorry if I offended you, ranger. Just my opinions and junk.
-Q/G(it's split into 2 parts because it was so long it wouldn't let me post it all together LOL)
Duke is probs gonna die or sacrifice himself to save Dawn or Twinkle. Maybe Dawn an Rwinkle are sisters idk. Still, Cutepups said Duke wasn't gonna e in the next story, so he might not live happily or he just might not show up.
DeleteThanks, your comments reminded me that I should focus on those things you mentioned for the story to make it better. Haha. ^-^'
DeleteUgh, I knowww.. I do dislike the idea of "love at first sight, yadiyadiyada", but my thoughts for the story compared to all the way back when I started it have obviously changed a lot. Their past lives are pretty influential to all the love stuff and how it happened. Yeah, still gotta work on actual themes.
@ Loppio:
Duke (as in the name/character, Duke) won't show up in next stories. Reason? I can't say. ;)
don't feel badddd I know you're trying hard cutepupios.
DeleteAw, and I feel so sad you're not awnsering my comments. Pls awnser D:
ReplyDeleteOh, I just went to bed right after publishing your 2 comments. Because, you know, school. And yes, I do sleep. I also didn't have enough time to check any blogging things this morning either. X3
Deletewhoa what happened while I was on hiatusnus
ReplyDeleteMany, MANY things.. >;)
Deleteok not really